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Mrs. Pruden
September, 2009
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My summer vacation was in Florida. It takes five hours in an airplane. In a car it takes six days. We went to the Blizzaard Beach and animal kingdom and Epcot. It was fun. We walked a lot. We went to a water slide.
Jack - My Summer
I went to summer school and I did music, art, and growing plants. I went to Tom Sawyer Camp. I went to the pool and I swam and I went to horses and I rode the horses all over the place. I went to archery and I shot a bow and arrow at the target. I got a bull's eye.
Ben - My Summer Vacation
My summer vacation began when we went to San Fransisco. When we went there we went into the hotel. Then, we went to Berkley. After that we went to a famous chocolate factory. We then went inside of a cable car and we were on a bumpy, steep road, down hills. The next day we went to the Golden Gate Bridge and then we went to shore. We saw a fisherman get a crab. We went to the swimming pool. The next day we went to the children's museum and it was fun there. Then we drove back home.
Jayden - My Summer Vacation
I went swimming in Palm Springs. I saw water slides, tubes, and other swimming objects. I was having fun! I played games and read books. I was thinking of my puppy too. I fed the birds and lizards. Then I went to sleep and back home.
Audrey - Summer Fun
I went to camp and for a field trip I went to a water park called Knott's Soak. At the water park there were lots of water slides and a giant pool. One pool made waves. It would pull me back. It took me forever to go to the back. We played and played and then we finally went home.
Jonah - My Summer Vacation
I went to Japan for summer vacation. It was dark in Japan. We slept on futons. The next day we went to Fuji. It was very cold and steep at Fuji. It was the second to last day and we went to the ninja plays. It was beautiful. My mom wanted to go up on top of the plays where it was like the old towns. The last day we went to a water park. We went into a dark green tube.
Michelle - My Best Vacation Ever
On my vacation I went to Canada. I had a great time. I saw birds and I met new friends and I played in the snow. It had a lot of stores and we celebrated my cousin's birthday in Canada. I ate the best waffles with famous syrup on the waffles. I bought a whoopie cushion. On my cousin's birthday we played Rock Band and we had a lot of fun.
Jordan - My Summer Vacation
I went to Washington D.C. for my summer vacation. I saw a lot of cool things like the Washington Monument and where they make money and other cool things. It was a very cool trip but it was time to go home. So I said good-bye to Washington D.C. but I will always remember I had a great time.
Gage - My Summer Days
My cousins came over to our house at night, The next day we woke up and had breakfast and we played. When they left I was really board for a few days. And then it was my birthday! I had five friends come and we played and played. When it was over I opened my presents. Fifteen days later science camp started. It was fun. I built a lot of things and after it was all most time for school.
Claire - My Summer Vacation
My summer vacation started with my trip to Arkansas. I went to my grandparents lake house. My sister and I went scootering. We went to the Red Apple Inn. That's a restuarant. We also went to my favorite pizza place. There were many different kinds of pizza. My favorite pizza was the chocolate explode. I also went to camp. My fort was really cool. I went to summer school I took art, sports, and music. I had a lot of friends there. I also went to Girl Scout camp. I went in the one-eyes monster cave. It was cool!
Andy - Summer Vacation
I started at home. When I was home I was doing my work. After that we went to San Diego Point. We went to Sea World. I saw Shamu there. I went on the scary ride called a trip to Alaska. At first the ride went up and then it went all over the place. Then we went back to the hotel.
Jason - My First Trip to Oregon
My summer started when I went to Oregon. I went camping and fishing. I walked up Pilot Butte with my friends. I went to the High Desert Museum. Then I went to Palm Springs and I went bowling.
Caitlin - My Summer Vacation
My summer vacation started at Zion. We hiked one trail in Zion. After Zion we went to the Grand Tetons. At the Grand Tetons, we didn't do a lot of things there. The next day I went to Yellowstone. We spent four nights in Yellowstone. I saw Old Faithful. After Yellowstone we went to Mount Rushmore. We took one hike in Mount Rushmore.
After Mount Rushmore, we went to Mount Rainier. I went to Crater Lake then I wen to the Redwoods. Then we went to Yosemite. I love Yosemite!
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Sofia - Summer Vacation
My summer vacation was good! I saw a dead sea turtle and baby in Mexico and we sent to San Diego.
Emilie - Summer Days
I went to San Diego for my vacation. I stayed at the Hilton. It was a very fancy hotel. They had their own beach and a pool. While we were there we went to Legoland. We went on lots of rides and they were lots of fun. We came home for one day then we hopped in the car and went to Grandma's house. It was lots of fun. And that was my vacation.
Johan - Adventure
On my vacation I went to San Francisco. I went swimming and raced my dad! I also went on a boat and I got to drive. I got to go home. I went to China and stayed for a long time. It was pretty.
Jose
My vacation was in Texas. I was riding my bike. I went to my grandma's and saw a face pecot. I played in a pool. I played with a water gun. I wet my cousin. I had dinner with my whole family. I played with my cousin and I passed a store with groceries and it was open.
Kayla
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